Forbidden Love
Tuesday November 06th 2007, 2:34 pm
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Forbidden Love
He sat there, with a pathetic look on his face. The woman sat across from him. A tear rolled down her cheek. She knew that he would never love her back. “Why won’t you love me?!” she yelled at him. In his chest was a butcher knife, and in her hands was his red blood.
Zoe Pierce
i like it, and it is very moving. But victim of what? thats what i wonder, because there are multiple different kinds of things that could use the word victim. Overall good story though.
Comment by ANGUS(he who loves barfy) 11.06.07 @ 2:36 pmIt is really good. I didn’t see the twist coming.
Comment by emstourtelot 11.06.07 @ 2:41 pmIt is really hard to see this scenario. Try using some dialogue between the two characters to set up the ending.
Comment by Mr. G 11.06.07 @ 2:46 pmLeave a comment
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